It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. Dinosaur, dodos …) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening.

with global warming and modifications in the ecosystem and natural habitats, more and more
animals
are pushed to the verge of extinction.
while
it is deemed a natural process for some people, I personally believe
animals
need to be preserved. on one hand, mankind has been exploiting natural resources and reservoirs to an optimal extent in order to provide essential commodities. construction of dams and deforestation are two great examples of these interfering with our environment.
Moreover
the increased demand for goods made from animal products,
such
as skins and horns,
also
leads to the rampant poaching of wild, endangered
animals
, rhinos
for instance
.
consequently
, more and more
animals
are in danger of extinction with the destruction of their homeplace.
thus
humankind needs to shoulder the responsibility for its action. Other justifications for saving wild
animals
involve the significant roles that they play in not only the balance of the ecosystem but
also
our lives. Everything in nature is connected, and if one species becomes extinct, many other
animals
and even plants will suffer as the food chain is disrupted. Wild
animals
also
have great aesthetic and socio-cultural values. They contribute to our rich bio-diversity that makes
this
planet a beautiful place. In numerous places around the world, many types of
animals
play an important role in different cultures.
For example
, in some religions, cows are revered and
worshiped
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as gods. The disappearance of many animal species does not always occur as a natural process but
as a consequence
of our doings. It is our obligation to help preserve wild
animals
because their extinction will have a severe influence on many important aspects of our lives.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
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