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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries.
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The table graph gives information about
food
consumption
 in four different countries.
Wheat
,
maize
 and
rice
 are the three basic
food
 for
consumption
.
Overall
, the
people
 in Egypt had the highest
consumption
 of basic
food
 with the exception of
rice
. Cambodia, Egypt and Mexico had great numbers of calorie
consumption
 in
Maize
.
However
, Poland had no consumers of
this
food
. In detail,
rice
 is the most consumed
food
 of Cambodian
people
 having 1445
calories
 a
day
 per individual
while
 Egyptian nationals eat 501
calories
 of
rice
 a
day
. The dwellers of Mexico and Poland showed little interest in eating
rice
 as their daily calorie intake is at 57 and 19, respectively.
However
, a different trend is seen for
wheat
 as it is the least consumed
food
 of
people
 in Cambodia at 18
calories
 a
day
 as compared with their
consumption
 of
rice
. A huge difference in figures as well for Mexico at 275
calories
 a
day
. Residents in Egypt had the greatest calorie intake for
wheat
 among other countries at 1095
calories
 per
day
 for each individual. Followed closely by
people
 in Poland consuming 865
calories
 of
wheat
 each
day
.
Furthermore
, the preferences of each country vary again in regard to their caloric
consumption
. Mexican nationalities is the highest consumer of
Maize
 having 1083
calories
 a
day
 per person.
That is
 more than half of the Egyptian
people
 consume 578 daily
calories
 each individual. Cambodia consumes
maize
 far more little at 103
calories
while
 Polanies do not eat
maize
 at all.
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