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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given three charts summarise information on how different countries spend and consume various resources and the number of people in different parts of the
world
. It can be clearly derived from the graph that even though most of the assets are utilized by the USA and Europe, it is merely a fourth of
world's
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the world's
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 population. Apart from that, it is unclear where people spend most of their income. The first chart shows that most of the expenditure is on unknown factors (40%) other than food, transportation or housing which is 24%, 18% and 12% respectively.
Secondly
, Asia is the biggest continent in the
world
 with 57% of
inhabitants
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its inhabitants
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.
However
, its contribution
in
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to
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utilization
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the utilization
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 of supplies is still unknown.
Moreover
, USA and Europe contribute equally, which is almost a quarter for each.
On the contrary
, almost
two thirds
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two-thirds
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 of their population
is
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are
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 exploiting
world
 resources. Africa,
however
, is merely a tenth of
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the world
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world
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world's
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 population and comes under
the
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apply
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40% of other unknown countries using resources.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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