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These days minors spend much
time
on computer
games
and
television
,
nevertheless
, most people consider that these types of amusement damage offspring's psychology.
However
,
while
I believe that
such
games
and
television
programs
are pastimes, I completely agree that
TV
and electronic
games
are bad for
children
's intellectual. In the first place, I consider that pc
games
impact
children
's brains
thus
some
games
teach fight our
children
and
also
these types of
games
affect
children
's emotional and daily lives. I think that
children
who play console
games
have several problems
therefore
these problems make lives difficult for
children
.
In particular
, if we take two
children
one of them plays
games
usually, we will observe the child who plays
games
have some intellectual problems
hence
these are insomnia, anorexia and forgetfulness all in all, I think that computer
games
are not suitable for
children
's mental health.
On the other hand
, it seems to me that most
TV
programs
are not proper for
children
in view of the fact that these
programs
harm offspring's state of mind,
therefore
,
therefore
a lot of parents are against
children
watching
television
because they think
that is
just a waste of
time
. We know that
children
are learning more information on
TV
therefore
some shows or
programs
affect
children
's brains.
In particular
, watching too many
television
shows cause hiccups, anxiety and fear
thus
I think that
children
do not spend too much
time
watching
TV
shows. 31 In conclusion, it strikes me that
children
should not spend much more
time
on pc
games
and
television
hence
these entertainments slash
children
's brains. Personally, I think that most
TV
shows and computer
games
cause many psychological issues which is why the way of think, they do not work much with
TV
and
also
electronic
games
.
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