The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
The charts show how much a UK school spent on different running costs in three separate years 1981, 1991 and 2001.
Overall
teacher's
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teachers'
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salaries
consulted the largest
cost
to the school, and
while
spending increased dramatically
for
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equipment and insurance, there were corresponding drops in expenditure on things
such
as books and on other workers'
salaries
. In all three years, the greatest expenditure was on staff
salaries
. But
while
other workers’
salaries
saw a fall from 28% in 1981 to only 15% of spending in 2001, teachers’ pay remained the biggest
cost
reaching 50% of total spending in 1991 and ending at 45% in 2001. Expenditures on resources and furniture and equipment were similar at 15% in 1981. The spending
for
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resources had increased to 20% by 1991 before decreasing to only 9% by the end of the period.
In contrast
, the
cost
of
the
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furniture and equipment saw an opposite trend.
This
cost
decreased to only 5% of total expenditure in 1991 but rose dramatically in 2001 when it represented 23% of the school budget.
Similarly
, the
cost
of insurance saw a rising trend, growing from only 2% to 8% by 2001.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, cost with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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