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The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate global projected
production
 percentages by different areas in 2040 and 2060.
For instance
, Services, Energy,Agriculture, Manufacturing, Agriculture, Materials, and Info-Com Tech are different examples of
production
 sectors.
Overall
, both pie charts are quite similar to each other
as
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in
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 percentages.
Services
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The services
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 sector would be dominated other sectors in 2040 and 2060, %40 and %41 respectively. Cultivation would be decreased to %1 in 2060 and would be the least
production
 interest
besides
 other areas. The second major field is Manufacturing with
estimated
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 31% and 33% respectively in 2040 and 2060.
Service
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The service
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 sector, in 2040, would have %
31
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a 31
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production
 rate, after 20 years
this
 rate slightly increased to %33.
In contrast
,
Energy
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the Energy
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 field
have
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has
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 a tendency
for
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to
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 fall by 2% between 2040 and 2060. Another field that
follow
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follows
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this
 trend is Agriculture.
Cultivation
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The cultivation
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 sector would be decreased to %1 from %4 in 2 decades. Materials and Info-Com Technologies would be slightly improved their
production
 by %1.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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