the map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map shows two proposed locations for a new supermarket
for
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the
town
of Garlsdon. The first potential location (S1) is outside the
town
itself
,
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and is sited just off the main road to the
town
of Hendon, lying 12 km to the
north-west
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northwest
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.
This
site is in the countryside and so would be able to accommodate a lot of car parking.
This
would make it accessible to shoppers for both Hindon and Garlsdon who could travel by car. As it is
also
close to the railway line linking the two towns to Cransdon (25 km to the
south-east
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), a potentially large number of shoppers would
also
be able to travel by train.
In contrast
, the suggested location, S2, is right in the
town
centre, which would be good for local residents. ,
Theoretically
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the store could be accessed by road or rail from the surrounding towns including Bransdon, but as the central area is a no-traffic zone, cars would be unable to park and access would be difficult.
Overall
, neither site is appropriate for all the towns, but for customers in Cransdon, Hindon and Garisdon, the out-of-
town
site (S1) would probably offer more advantages.
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