The use of smartphones is decreasing our collective intelligence because we are reliant on the technology not on our own minds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, It's getting generous to use electronic
devices
for personal life. Despite the convenience of using high-edge technology, there are pros and cons to using electronic
devices
in daily routines. Since the IT technique has developed steadily, most people are exposed to using electronic
devices
at workplaces, schools, and extra.
For
this
reason, using a smartphone or tablet or computer is getting universal in the current era. Electronic
devices
used in modern life are quite infiltrated worldwide. You can easily imagine one person waking up, checking the time using
smartphone
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,
preparing
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to go to work or school by using google Maps to go direct
of
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where they want to go. After ,that
this
person uses electronic
devices
-computer, iPad,
Tablet
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tablets
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,
smartphone
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, etc for their work or study.
After
this
, they go the home and use electronic
devices
to watch Netflix or Disney plus for enjoyment. For a whole of
these daily routine
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, you can acknowledge that even though we generally think of ourselves we control what we are doing is not true. Basically without electronic
devices
, we cannot do anything. We already rely on electronic
devices
more than we expected. I strongly agree that
human
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humans
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lean on electronic
devices
more than in any other century. So there is a reason why we intentionally try to use electronic
devices
less than what we expect.
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