The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California, and the rest of the world.
The three pie charts show/reveal/ demonstrate the difference in the amount of
water
consumed in three identical/ dissimilar sectors (residential sector
, industry and agriculture
) in San
Diego
Country, California
and the world as a whole.
The initial impression from the chart is = The most striking/ outstanding /notable feature is in San
Diego
and California
, [water
use for households [accounts for = represents] the highest proportion = the highest proportion of water
consumption in households is clearly evident]. In marked contrast, agriculture
consumes the vast majority of the water
used in the world = The vast majority of water
utilized worldwide is used for agriculture
, which contrasts markedly/ vividly.
In San
Diego
and California
, water
usage for households takes up around 60 % and 39%, respectively. The amount of water
used for this
sector
worldwide is only 8%. The opposite trend can be seen when we look at water
consumption/ In striking contrast, another distinguishing feature is water
consumption in agriculture
. This
sector
utilizes/ gets through around 69% of global water
use, while
/ whereas
the figures for San
Diego
and California
are significantly/ dramatically lower, at only 17% and 28%.
Turning to the remaining sector
, we can see that the water
usage for the industrial sector
in San
Diego
and the world [have equal proportion / is proportionally similar to] 23% whilst/ whereas
the figure for California
is slightly minimally higher, at 33%Submitted by hihihahahoho on
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