The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California, and the rest of the world.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California, and the rest of the world.
The three pie charts show/reveal/ demonstrate the difference in the amount of
water
consumed in three identical/ dissimilar sectors (residential
sector
, industry and
agriculture
) in
San
Diego
Country,
California
and the world as a whole. The initial impression from the chart is = The most striking/ outstanding /notable feature is in
San
Diego
and
California
, [
water
use for households [accounts for = represents] the highest proportion = the highest proportion of
water
consumption in households is clearly evident]. In marked contrast,
agriculture
consumes the vast majority of the
water
used in the world = The vast majority of
water
utilized worldwide is used for
agriculture
, which contrasts markedly/ vividly. In
San
Diego
and
California
,
water
usage for households takes up around 60 % and 39%, respectively. The amount of
water
used for
this
sector
worldwide is only 8%. The opposite trend can be seen when we look at
water
consumption/ In striking contrast, another distinguishing feature is
water
consumption in
agriculture
.
This
sector
utilizes/ gets through around 69% of global
water
use,
while
/
whereas
the figures for
San
Diego
and
California
are significantly/ dramatically lower, at only 17% and 28%. Turning to the remaining
sector
, we can see that the
water
usage for the industrial
sector
in
San
Diego
and the world [have equal proportion / is proportionally similar to] 23% whilst/
whereas
the figure for
California
is slightly minimally higher, at 33%
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