The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010

The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010
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graph
give a percentage of teachers comparing the gender gap
according to
several types of British academic institution in 2010. On the whole, female
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accounted for
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majority
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schools
for young children
while
male educators expanded their
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those for teenagers.
To begin
with, it is noticeable that almost all of
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in
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and primary school were women in 2010, whose percentage reflected well above 90%.
However
, in following educational steps
such
as
secontary
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secondary
schools
and tertiary
schools
,
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amount of male and female teachers
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employed,
although
there was still a minor outnumbered figure
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5% for women in secondary
schools
.
On the other hand
, the trend which could be seen previously that
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educators’
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population
was reversed in private training institutions, which represented about 5% higher for male employees than female those.
Likewise
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recorded more outstanding
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compared to proceeding data that three
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quarters
for men.
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