The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agriculture land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agriculture land becomes less productive.  The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s
The pie chart illustrates the cause of worldwide
land
degradable. The table
also
represents that how three regions ( North America,
Europe
,
Oceania
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) were affected by the causes of
land
degradation
during the 1990s.
Overall
, over-grazing, over-farming and deforestation were the main reasons for decreasing
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land
productivity.
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Europe
had the highest proportion of total
land
degradation
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whereas
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North America was the least. It can be clearly seen that the percentage of
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gazing was up to 35% ,
on the other hand
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accounted for 30%.
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over cultivation
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had to 28%.
Besides
, others affected the
land
only 7%
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Europe
was affected badly rather than
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two regions by the causes of
land
degradation
which was up to 23% and
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Europe
's
land
was hampered
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deforestation
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9.8%. The figure for Oceania had to 13% which was caused for over-grazing at 11.3%. The percentage of
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North America had to 5% and it was
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the lowest proportion.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, europe, degradation with synonyms.
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