THE USE OF SMARTPHONES IS DECREASING OUR COLLECTIVE INTELLIGENCE BECAUSE WE ARE RELIANT ON THE TECHNOLOGY NOT ON OUR OWN MINDS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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smartphones
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fact, we are completely addicted to them. Any technological innovation has always brought with it both positive and negative aspects, advantages and disadvantages. The
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history
is full of similar cases, it is
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to think about what the electronic calculators meant for the 20th century. The rapidity in counting has been pitted against the loss of the usual ability in
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generation.
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lost
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familiarity with elementary mathematical rules.
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school teachers
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dictation leading students to a progressive worsening of hand-writing skills. Even the introduction of smartphones has two sides of the same coin. From my point of view ,the most advantage of the smartphone is
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“portability”. It is always with us
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We have gained the possibility to call someone immediately without spending time
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searching a phone booth.
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issues or
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down
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. The possibility to use apps to arrange
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, make online shopping,
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personal
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and payments is a saving-time advantage and
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protection thanks to a paper-less approach. There is a negative side as well, of course. First of all, I can say the lack of privacy and the almost pathological addiction between users and
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. We rely on smartphones so much that we are no longer used to
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our appointments or the grocery list by ourselves. When we cannot use our cellphone because of low battery or bad signal we feel vulnerable and almost “naked” In conclusion , I agreed
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that smartphones have been decreasing our memorization abilities but
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side. In a world where technology goes
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way think to step back in
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pre-smartphone age would be like to come back in a world without electricity
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