Most modern families have both parents working as a result children spend less and less time with their parents. What is the reason for this? What problems can this cause?

Some of the families now in our generation have both parents working all day.
Hence
, they don't have enough
time
to spend with their adolescent. I agree with
this
point of view. In my
opinion
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to our ,parents there are many reasons behind
this
situation
such
as that they don't have a choice just to follow their bosses, to accomplish a task that assigns to them and the most important reason they think a possible chance to have a good position to the near future to a company
as a result
providing needs of their families, educational matter.
In addition
, having a fund to support of medical needs of their own families and they do not need to borrow from someone else.
However
, on the part of the ,
children
I think having more
time
to communicate or interact with their parents are precious
time
. In some way, parental guidance role is to educate their
children
, how is the proper way to face other people, when someone is not good when it comes to interaction, what is the better way to treat them even if they are not good people and more important lesson how to become a better person.
To conclude
, we know working every day and all day is our need to do. Despite of busy, schedule we need to make
time
for our
children
and be responsible for them.
Children
need our guidance to become more mature enough to do a lot of things in
this
world.
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