The Table Below Shows the Numbers of Visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Table Below Shows the Numbers of Visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table below illustrates how many tourists have visited Ashdown Museum before and after it was refurbished. The pie chart shows the extent of satisfaction
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visitors
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experience during the two periods. The
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obviously
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up, before refurbishment, there were only 74,000 people visited Ashdown Museum.
However
, after
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, there were 92,000 people visited
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tour site. From the pie chart, we can see the proportion of “Very satisfied” and “Dissatisfied”
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obviously changed. The proportion of “Very satisfied” has
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from 15% to 35%. The part of “Dissatisfied” has changed from 40% to 15%. The
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slightly different as well. The
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of “Very dissatisfied” has dropped from 10% to 5%.
On the other hand
, the
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of ”Satisfied” has rose from 30% to 40%. The
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5%, there is no
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before or after the refurbishment.
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