There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making temperature higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperature rising?

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industrial
production
of
materials
are
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developing civilization efficiently, there
is
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some consequences of
such
a massive amount of
production
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such
as climate change and global warming which results in an increased
temprature
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temperature
over time.
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essay will discuss the main causes of temperature rising through
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man-made
materials
. It is certain that
,
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electronic devices, which are helping people's daily life, need
to
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lots of raw
materials
for their developing and serial
production
states which leads to
depletion
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the depletion
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of sources like
woods
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wood
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,
water
and different metals. These actions
also
result in deforestation in a short term. Deforestation and depletion of
water
sources are both directly and indirectly related to increased
carbon
footprint and eventually increase in temperature. One of the most important industrial
production
material
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materials
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is plastic which is resistant to
biodegeneration
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degeneration
in
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longterm
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. Because of the chemical structure of
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plastic, it has to
recycled
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with technological processes.
This
unsuccessful degeneration affects
water
sources and natural
habitat
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badly. Another issue is
overconsumption
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the overconsumption
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of raw
materials
lead to
high
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a high
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level of
carbon based
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gases like
a
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carbon
dioxide. High
level
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levels
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of
carbon
dioxide in the atmosphere
also
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related to global warming. Processed foods
such
as salami, pastrami or fast foods are great examples
for
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overconsumption of
the
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raw
materials
.
This
action has a poor impact on
environment
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and human health. In conclusion, industrial products (
such
as electronic devices and processed foods) and overconsumption of raw
materials
such
as wood,
water
and metals result in
an
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increased temperature and deforestation which is directly related to global warming.
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