The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California

and the rest of the world.
This
pie chart depicts compare
water
usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.It is clear from the graph
that is
the most uses
water
between
three
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the three
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region
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regions
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.
According to
what is shown,we can see San Diego the residential
have
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has
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a big ratio using
water
60
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% and industry
have
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has
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23% and the
Agricultre
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Agriculture
have 17%.
While
the
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apply
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California the residential have a big proportion using
water
39%
and
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apply
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the industry
have
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33% and
Agricultre
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Agriculture
have
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28%.
the
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apply
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worldwide
the
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apply
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Agricultre
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Agriculture
have a huge proportion using
water
69% and the industry have 23% and
the
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residential
have
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has
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8%.
To sum up
,we could say that
the
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worldwide
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has
a
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the
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bigest
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biggest
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ratio for using
water
between San Diego with California.
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