The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

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water

usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.It is clear from the graph

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a big ratio using

water

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% and industry

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23% and the

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Agriculture

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California the residential have a big proportion using

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33% and

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Agriculture

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28%.

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worldwide

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have a huge proportion using

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69% and the industry have 23% and

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residential

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8%.

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worldwide

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bigest

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ratio for using

water

between San Diego with California.

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