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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures illustrate information about the
reasons
 why people choose to cycle or drive to
work
. Units are measured by
percentage
. As can be seen from the pie charts, health and fitness and
also
 less pollution are responsible for the main factors of people who choose cycling to
work
.
Moreover
, the most significant
percentage
 of driving to
work
 is allocated to comfort.
In particular
, almost the same
percentage
 of people prefer cycling or driving because of their speed. The most significant proportion of
reasons
 for driving to
work
, 40%, is used for comfort. Followed by distance to
work
 which accounts for 18% less.
Additionally
, the lowest
percentage
 of
reasons
 belongs to safer than cycling which is 11%.
On the other hand
, health and fitness and
also
 less pollution are responsible for the largest number of
reasons
 for cycling to
work
 at 30%. The other reason
that is
 no parking problems allocated 15% which is twice less than less pollution and health and fitness. The figure for faster than driving is 12% and there is no significant difference between the figure for driving to
work
 which is 11%.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, work, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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