Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

These days,
people
spend most of their
time
out of the house working or going out with their friends. Some
people
think that sugary products should be more expensive to encourage
people
to consume less
sugar
. I completely agree with
this
view.
Firstly
, the government should approve supervision rules for restaurants, foods, and snacks. Because men and women spend most of their
time
out of their apartments working or having fun with friends and they don't have
time
to cook and have a house cook. So they have no options to buy food or coffee and snacks
such
as cake on break
time
which has
sugar
.
As a result
, compared to the past, the lifestyle has completely changed and the government should assign a budget for the supervision of food to become healthy.
Secondly
, the government can approve tax laws on foods which has
sugar
to make
people
can't buy sugary meals.
On the other hand
, some
people
believe that our body needs to have
sugar
for energy.
However
, enough
sugar
is not bad but more than enough causes many health problems. In conclusion, you need to have
sugar
but if you use more than needed, it makes the body harmful.
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