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products
containAdd an article
a
level
of Fix the agreement mistake
levels
sugar
, which causes many health
problems. specialists believe that the sugary products
prices
should increase
to encourage people
to consume less sugar
. I totally agree with this
idea.
these days eating food or drinking sugary products
increase
among people
and it causes many diseases and problems among them. Increasing their prices
is a method to avoid of
them. Change preposition
apply
this
idea has two great reasons. First
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reduce
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reduced
people
who consume sugary products
,
because to be expensive of them cause Remove the comma
apply
people
to buy fewer them
owing to as an economic aspect it doesn't economically viable Change preposition
of them
as a result
people
's consumption of sugary products
decreases plus some diseases such
as diabetes eliminate among them and also
they less pay for health
issues.for example
according to
harward university research, after increasing prices
of sugary products
in United States between 1995 to 2005 , the number of people
who has diabetes decreased 15 per cent.
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growing
of
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in
prices
which have much sugar
can change people
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people's
lifestyle
. Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
this
procedure causes people
change
their eating habits and tend to consume healthy foods or drinks which have less Add the particle
to change
sugar
, therefore
it leads to increase
health
and reduced
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reduction
in
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apply
people
at
different ages. for ,Change preposition
of
instance
I have a cousin who lives in Swiss. he used to buy sugary drinks a lot and it caused Add an article
the instance
he
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him
became
overweight. After the government established a rule which increased sugary drinks price, he changed his eating habits and could decrease his weight.
in conclusion , Change the verb form
to become
to
be expensive Fix the infinitive
apply
of
sugary Change preposition
apply
products
lead to increase
health
and change in lifestyle and eating habits among people
which
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apply
both
of Correct pronoun usage
apply
them
are beneficial for Correct pronoun usage
which
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and Add an article
the individual
also
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