A freiend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. th your letter - explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday - describe some possible disadvantages - say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Richa, Hope you are doing well .

This

such

a great piece of news that you are going

for

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camping for one week

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the

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Munnar hill station , Shimla at the beginning of the next month. As you know ,

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had already

spend

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my vacations at

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same camping location

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the

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yesteryear.

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, as per my experience over there, you would be able to enjoy not only scenic beauty there

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but

also

the atmosphere filled with serenity and

tranquility

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Moreover

, you were asking about that stargazing trip , I would recommend you

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hire a local guide for that because he would take you to

proper

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location to observe the glazing and twinkling stars.

However

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also

want to discuss

about

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few worse things that could happen there.

Firstly

, you should have your umbrella and raincoat with you because

weather

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there is

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unperdictable

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unpredictable

Secondly

unfortunately

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if there would be

pouring

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on that day ,it could spoil your plans to go outside .

Last

but not least , do not forget to carry insect repellent with you when you would be at the top of

hill

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the hill

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station . I am feeling very bad that

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am not accompanying you because of my exams

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that week but

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promise for

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vacations

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we will plan it together to go there. Hope you will enjoy your trip and

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will wait for your next letter to hear from you about your experience over there.

Yours

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friend, Deva

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The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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