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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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A glance at the pie chart provided reveals
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the major
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land
degradation
.
Meanwhile
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 the table depicts how these
reasons
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3 parts of the world in1990s. As it is clear,over-grazing,first of all, is the biggest
causes
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 of
land
degradation
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worldwide.
In addition
,deforestation and over-cultivation are
also
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 main
reasons
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 problems in these countries with
30percent
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30 percent
 and 28
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 respectively in
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north
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 America,Europe and Oceania.
Furthermore
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 has
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 to other
reasons
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degradation
. One particular point that
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 by the figure is that,among
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nations,Europe had the greatest proportion of
degradation
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land
,during
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,at 23
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.And
biggest
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 factor was not over-grazing but deforestation with 9.8
percent
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.
Secondly
,in Oceania with a total of 13%
land
degradation
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its
land
.And over-grazing in Oceania is the biggest element of
degradation
 with 11.3% .North America had less influence by
degradation
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 with a total of 5
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, land, degradation, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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