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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
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These figures
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depict
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 the major reasons why agricultural land turns less productive and how these causes
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three areas of the world during the 1990s. It is clear from the graphs that
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over-grazing is one of the leading causes of worldwide deterioration. And, the most lands degraded are in Europe which
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 about 23
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per cent
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the pie chart, we can see that the main cause of worldwide land degradation is overgrazing and it is about 35%
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deforestation and over-cultivation which are about 28%. And other reasons that can make
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 in global land showing up as 7%. So
that is
 nothing to overgrazing, deforestation,
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 we can see three regions North America, Europe, and Oceania. So in
Europe
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 we can see Significant rates as we can see in de forestal is at
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