The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

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The provided graphs show the

reasons

that contributed to the decreased productivity of agricultural

lands

and

also

depicts

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depict

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the land degradation percentage in three regions.

According to

the pie chart, over-grazing and deforestation are

two

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the two

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main

reasons

for land’s degradation in productivity and they both caused more than 30% degradation of

lands

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land

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each.

Over cultivation

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Over-cultivation

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is another prominent

reasons

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reason

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for

less

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the less

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productive

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apply

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agricultural

lands

and it contributed

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to 28

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% of the total causes of barren

lands

. All other

reasons

contributed 7% as the causes for barren

lands

According to

the table data, North American

lands

became less productive by 5% and

over cultivation

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over-cultivation

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and

over grazing

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over-grazing

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were

two

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the two

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most significant

reasons

for

this

. European farming

lands

’ fertility got decreased by 23% which was quite high compared to North America and deforestation was the main reason for that. South Pacific Oceania region

also

faced

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13% less productivity in their farming

lands

and over-grazing was the main reason for that.

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