Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #animals #zoos

Animals

are kept in

zoos

all around the world.

Zoos

are used as a tourist

attraction

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by most countries which requires wild

animals

of different species to be present there, I think

zoos

are not a place to keep wild

animals

and they should be kept in their natural habitat. There are many reasons

as to

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why

the

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animals

should be kept in their natural habitat and not in

the

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zoos

first

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they are a precious gift of God

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thrive

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natural

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a natural

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environment

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with challenges and celebrations. They should be kept in animal parks or safari where they can feel less caged and freer. We don't need

zoos

to appreciate the beauty of these creatures, they can be seen over the internet or

people

can visit their countries to have a look at them and feel happy for them in their natural environment.

Moreover

zoos

take advantage of animal misery and make money from it which is why

zoos

should be closed and govt. should act against them rather than

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money from

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However

, many

people

think

zoos

are an excellent place to educate their children about wild

animals

and their behaviour. They are a safe place for wild

animals

and these

animals

can be protected

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and avoid extinction.

In addition

this

people

also

feel that

zoos

are a positive way to earn money and tourism.

For example

, in

Sydney

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many tourists frequently visit the Taronga zoo. In conclusion,

people

feel that

zoos

are good places to keep wild

animals

. I believe

zoos

should close we don't need

animals

to suffer because of us, we can look for these wild

animals

and their behaviour over the internet or travel to them and be happy for these creatures living in their natural habitat. We must close all

zoos

in the future.

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