In many cities the population is increasing. Some say that the urbanisation process denies us knowing our neighbors, and this causes a loss of community sense. What is the main problem with this? What measures can be taken to overcome it?
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loss
of community sense among Add an article
the loss
people
in big cities
. In this
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i
will try to explore the main problem and provide Change the capitalization
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resolution
to solve Correct article usage
a resolution
this
issue.
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noticing
a
big Correct article usage
apply
cities
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people
interacting
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interact
countryside
. From my Add an article
the countryside
perspective
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people
in big cities
don't have enough time to communicate with their neighbors
because Change the spelling
neighbours
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a job
the job
job
in the big Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
cities
take whole
day and Add an article
a whole
the whole
people
have more duties and responsibilities owing to this
people
can be frustrated and stressful
and don't have Replace the word
stressed
desire
to communicate with Change the article
the desire
neighbors
. Change the spelling
neighbours
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,Furthermore
due to
lack
of Correct article usage
the lack
entartaining
facilities in the countryside Correct your spelling
entertaining
such
as amusement parks and cinemas, people
entertain themself by interacting with Correct pronoun usage
their neighbors
neighbors
. Change the spelling
neighbours
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instance
they Add a comma
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inviting
each other at home more frequently rather than Wrong verb form
invite
people
in cities
.
Undoubtedely
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Undoubtedly
this
growing problem should be solved with help of authorities
. Local authorities should conduct events on weekends in Correct article usage
the authorities
neighborhoods
. It can facilitate Change the spelling
neighbourhoods
to
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apply
communicate
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communication
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with neighbors
neighbors
and know each other closer. Change the spelling
neighbours
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addition
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people
should be kind to each other to create friendly
environment for interacting Add an article
a friendly
amid
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with
neighbors
.
In conclusion, Change the spelling
neighbours
it is clear that
communicating is essential
aspect Add an article
an essential
in
every society. Government should help to maintain Change preposition
of
friendly
and supportive community by Correct article usage
a friendly
prividing
some events in Correct your spelling
providing
cities
. Obviously
it is hard for some Add a comma
,Obviously
people
to Correct your spelling
regularly
regularlry
communicate with Correct your spelling
regularly
neighbors
, Change the spelling
neighbours
however
with Add a comma
,however
joint
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the joint
effort
we can overcome Add a comma
,effort
this
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