The maps show a road system as it is now and the proposed changes in the future to reduce the number of accidents.

The maps show a road system as it is now and the proposed changes in the future to reduce the number of accidents.
The maps illustrate a
road
system as it
now
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and the proposed changes in the future to cut down the number of accidents.
Overall
, it can be seen clearly from the map that the
road
will be seen
a
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significant modernization in order to enhance the safety
for
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everyone. One notable feature is that the roundabout will be constructed and more traffic lights will be installed. Looking at the map, we can see that there will be some changes
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which accident happens frequently. In the
north-west
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of the
road
,
while
there will be no alternations in the location of the school and the City
road
, 4 traffic lights will be installed in each corner , and the low lane will be removed .
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the middle of the map, the roundabout will be built to merge the city
road
and the forest
road
, which will reduce the accidents on the
road
.
Furthermore
, the supermarket will be constructed in the roundabout which is more convenient for the consumers.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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