more and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on endangered list. what are the reasons for this? what can be done to solve this problem?

In the world, one of the most beautiful species is
animals
. The world is for them
also
. In the modern era,increasing in the endangered list and the
extinction
of wild
animals
are more. To some extent, human activities are the cause of
this
global Issue.
This
discussion delineates the cause,effect,suggestions and possible solutions for the dilemma. Generally speaking, People are very selfish. They don't want to know what problems happening on the other side. Society tortures
animals
for their self-needs.
For instance
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of carbon emission products result in global warming,
beacuse
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because
of global warming ice mount melts and
sea
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level increase
thus
result
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in
extinction
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of
animals
living there,
other
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example is some of the perfumes available in the market are produced from
animals
. For the
,
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preparation they are killing
animals
. Substances like leather, blankets, and clothes are coming from
animals
. we all know that it is human needs but, by doing
this
the list of endangered wild
animals
is increasing.
Instead
of harming the
animals
, need to do research for an alternate solution for making
this
kind of
things
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. In India deer are on the endangered list still people are hunting deer for making odour things. Countries should strengthen the rules and punishments for saving
the
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animals
. Another reason for the
extinction
of
animals
is human carelessness, To cite an example, Driving vehicles through some restricted
forest
area. There is a high chance of hitting
animals
. Throwing things like plastic in the sea. It will affect the underwater species and some people do even more cruelty to the
animals
. Sometimes they camped in the
forest
and make food. A spark of fire is enough for destroying the whole
forest
and the
animals
in the
forest
will
also
die. Government and the public are equally responsible for animal
extinction
. The constitution for animal rights should focus more on it. They should give punishments like imprisonment and huge fines need to implement.
To conclude
, Government should implement some awareness programs for the Public for saving the
extinction
of wild
animals
,Hopefully in ,
future
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this
issue will vanish
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from the world
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