The two maps show a park in 2010 and in present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate the changes in ''Grande
Park
''. The first map describes an overview of the year 1920 and the second one is related to today.
Initially
, the garden is between Eldon Street, which is located in the South, and Arnold Street, which is placed in the North. In 1920, the park
had a fountain in the middle of the area. However
, now, the fountain was removed and a rose garden, which is surrounded by seats
, was structured.
In the west part, an amphitheatre is built instead
of a stage and also
, and seats
are removed. In the same place, in 1920, there were two rose gardens in both the north and south parts of the garden. Whilst, the bottom one is destructured, the upper one remains the same. Also
, neither the north seats
nor the south ones existed anymore.
To the east part of the park
, the pond and the rose greenhouse no more existed. There are a cafe and a play area for children are built. Moreover
, there is a water feature link to those places. In addition
, the east seats
are destructured and an entrance underground park
is placed.
To sum up
, the park
was totally changed from 1920 to now on.Submitted by mstfizzet1 on
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