it is a fact that people nowadays are under a lot of pressure and their lives are becoming increasingly stressful. what could be the possible reasons for this? what are the some solutions to adress this issue?

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people
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pressure
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in
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as well as
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life
and are becoming stressed, in
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essay we shall discuss various reasons for
this phenomena
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like
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of getting higher
grades
in education and meeting certain
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performance
standards at
work
etc.
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solution
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to handle
this
stress
like
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comparing
students
in education based on their
grades
and
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counselling to employees. To embark upon,
people
are being put under pressure from early stages of
life
for example
in schools they
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againest
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against
each other by the
grades
they get,
this
results in
students
being
stessful
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stressful
to get higher
grades
than other
students
. Even in adult
life
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take an employee who is
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under certain parameters to meet performance standards at
work
,
this
makes
people
more and more
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stressful
successful
in their
work
life
.
In addition
to
this
even in personal
life
humans are under so much
stress
to provide
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life
to their children and partner,
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them with their needs and wants
putting
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people
under financial
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pressure
. There are
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ways we can overcome
this
stress
in
life
, starting with reforms in education, where we have to stop measuring
students
based on their
grades
,
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foremost
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that puts
students
under
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pressure
and
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in
stressful
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life
.
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to the next important factor
work related
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stress
, companies should focus on
work
-
life
balance for
its
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empolyees
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employees
and stop measuring their performances.
Moreover
, in order to reduce
empolyees
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employees
employee
stress
organizations should provide
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empolees
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employees
with
counsilling
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counselling
facilities so that it will help them to properly manage their
work
and personal
life
. In
conclusion
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we have discussed various reasons for
stress
for
people
like
grades
in school and
work place
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workplace
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performance measuring
; and
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given solutions like
stop
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stopping
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measuring
students
based on
grades
and
wrok
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work
life
balance
initiative
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for employees by organizations.
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