Some people think that children should start school at early very early age, but others believe that children should go to school until they are older.Disscuss both views and give your opinion.

Learning children and educating them is the
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of individual future and community development. Some people believe that children should start learning as early as possible
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other people oppose
this
idea and have the opinion that they should start learning after 7 years. In
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we will discuss both views and give our
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. To
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early education, perhaps parents think that school provides a situation for their kids to grow mentally faster and enables them to reach university and higher education earlier. These young
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will definitely have better job opportunities and more chances for popular
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in adulthood. They are
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self-confident teenagers because they are ahead of
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peers.
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my feeling that young babies should play at an early age and have their own ages related hobbies rather than learning.
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helps them discover their talents and found what they are interested in. It should be possible that if young people commence learning too early, they may lose their enthusiasm for learning at older ages and
for
this
reason they
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of school when education is the most important stage in their
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.All in all, it is better to spend their childhood days with happiness and freely with their friends.
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I completely agree with
this
point of view.
To conclude
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although
starting to learn in the early years of life can be beneficial, it is not worth the examination considering the problem that may arise.
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