Most modern families have both parents working as a result children spend less and less time with their parents. What is the reason for this? What problems can this cause?

In recent times having both of our
parents
go out to work is a common thing because it means a family can get more income for their households.
However
,
this
issue raises awareness about the lack of time that
parents
can give to their
children
which affects
children
’s psychology.
Due to
some increases in basic expenses, especially education fees, a lot of
parents
are pushed to get more income.
For instance
, in Bali, a good education at an elementary school can cost more than one million rupiahs a month.
Although
there is another option like a government school
that is
cheaper, for some people there is peer pressure to be in the best school.
This
pushes them to leave their kids at home and chase more money.
On the other hand
,
this
issue is causing a lack of attention that
children
can get from their
parents
. Some
children
who are having no one at home will try to find some companions outside because they do not want to feel lonely. As a
parent
it is good to be present even though they cannot be at home, they can give messages or calls to make
children
feel loved. If the
parent
is absent in the
children
's lives,
then
it can lead to some mental health problems in their adolescence. In my opinion, if the
parent
can balance working and
being
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presentable to their
children
then
it can be the best option.
For example
, having time for the family after 6 PM on the weekday and all day on the weekend is a working
parent
's priority, so the
children
can still feel attention and love in the family.
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