People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increased effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effects of this outweigh the negative effects?

Undoubtedly, in
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world,
advertisements
becomes
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important
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part of humankind which
effects
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them in different ways. In
this
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we will discuss numerous good
a
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well as bad
impcts
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impacts
if
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of
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advertisements
. To commence with, in
today
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world
due to
hectic life
people
get very less time to explore their favourite sites for the shopping of goods and services.
therefore
,
advertisements
seems
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boonful
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bountiful
to
people
for knowledge of new trends and fashion which
further
help them make
a
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quick decisions regards their purchases.
For example
, Apple company advertise their products to give knowledge and
guidence
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guidance
to
their
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customers about new products.
In addition
,
advertisements
become a source of income for many
people
as
their
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are
alot
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a lot
of
platform
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platforms
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for
advertisemnets
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advertisements
advertisement
to attract consumers very quickly. Applications like Instagram,
Facebook
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and Facebook
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are earning good
profit
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profits
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. On
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other
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side, Numerous
people
are promoting cheap and
poor quality
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of
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products and services respectively through attractive
advertisements
.
Moreover
, fraudsters are using
personal
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the personal
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informtion
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information
of customers as they click on links to open
the
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advertisements
for more information. In conclusion,
Advertisements
makes
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people
's lives very easy and comfortable as everything is just a click away so in my opinion whether
advertisements
have some negative impacts but these
are outweigh
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by
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its
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their
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benefits.
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