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The map below is of town of Garldson, a new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of town of Garldson, a new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map shows the plan of two potential
are
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is
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 to
built
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build
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 a new
supermaket
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supermarket
 in a town called Garldson.
It is clear that
 both
potential
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potentials
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 will have some advantages and disadvantages.
Overall
, the new establishment will
benefits
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benefit
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 not only
people
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the people
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 of Garldson but
also
nearby
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the nearby
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 towns The first proposal was to
built
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build
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 a
supermaket
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supermarket
on
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in
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 the countryside.
This
 will definitely will not add to the
build up
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build-up
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 of traffic in the city. These
place
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places
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also
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are also
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 only
a
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apply
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12 km from another town which might attract more buyers. Residents of Garldson will need to travel specifically for shopping which might not be ideal for some.
On the other hand
, the
planned
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plan
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 for the other potential area was in the town centre. The benefits to attract Garland residents
is
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are
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 high especially if they
already
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are already
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 in the local area.
However
,
this
 will not help the flow of traffic in the area.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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