A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money. either to sponsor a child sports team for two years or to pay for two open air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter •Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team •Summarise the benefits of paying for the concert •Say how you think the company should spend the money.

Dear Sir or Madam, Hope you are well. I am
writting
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writing
this
letter, to express my
thoughs
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thoughts
regarding your sponsorship of
sports
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team
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teams
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or
open air
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concerts within
Knowles
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Wharf area. From my point of view, sponsor of a child sports team
its
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is
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marvellous
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idea. Unfortunately, there are
no
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many places, where children can develop their talents. It is irrefutable, that everyone should have a chance to do what they love.
In addition
, some
of
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the
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parents are not able to
affort
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afford
that
kind
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of
activities
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for their children. There are lots of pupils with
extraordinary
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an extraordinary
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ability
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to do sports,
however
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poverty makes it, only a dream.
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, sponsorship of
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open air concerts
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,
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would be as
well
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astonishing idea. It could
intergrate
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integrate
families, especially parents and children.
Overall
, I would say that there
is
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more benefits to
sponsor
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child
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a child
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sport
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team over
an
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open air
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concerts. Creating the future for our kids,
its
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the key. I am sure, all young people would
approciate
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appreciate
that idea and develop their skills.
Sinceraly
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Sincerely
, M
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