A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sport team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to company in your letter -describe the benefit of sponsoring the sport team -summarise the benefits of paying the concepts -say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to suggest some renovation ideas for our

reception

area

with respect to the complaints which have been received.

Firstly

, I would like to point out the complaints about our present

reception

counter.

However

we are providing a sitting facility, but the arranged chairs are old fashion, and it is quite uncomfortable for guests.

In addition

, some feedback was that better to fix the air conditioner rather than the fans and

also

some are mentioned that the entrance should be more attractive.

Moreover

, welcoming guests is essential, because that would be the first impression of our firm. So, it is our responsibility to make the

area

more comfortable and attractive. Sometimes during the peak season, visitors would have to wait for a long time and during that period they will spend their time in the

reception

Therefore

, it is crucial to make the space more entertaining. Since we have a spacious

area

for

reception

, we have to do some refurbishments.

For instance

, the sitting

area

could change with new couches and a tea table, to provide a centralised air conditioning facility.

Furthermore

, decorating walls with different paintings and providing a television

also

would be captive for visitors. I hope these ideas would be beneficial for your renovation process and make your new

reception

area

more productive. Best regards, Asha Vijayan

Submitted by ashakiranbhavsar on Sat Jan 28 2023

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