In the modern world today the rate of divorce is rising dramatically in most societies. What are the main reasons for getting divorced? What can be done to solve the issue?

Nowadays individualism outweighs love and affection.
As a result
,
separation
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the separation
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between husbands and
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is remarkably increased. Studies found that among the various factors,
women
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empowerment and modern values were the major reasons. Here, the following paragraphs
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these causes along with some steps that would be helpful to reduce the percentage of divorce... To start with, separation, one of the major social problems is an outcome of
financial
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freedom of women.
For instance
, if women start to
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office
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or to earn their
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livelihood
, they become less dependent on a male member.
On the other hand
, capitalist norms and values which
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based on individual rights
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talks
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about
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equal opportunities for both that
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in decreasing the tendency of compromising and
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tolerance
.
In addition
, modern laws open a door to come out
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a bad
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... As one of the alarming issues, breakup after marriage demands collective actions.
First
of all, any type of domestic violence should be
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by implementing laws. After that importance of a family
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should
be prioritised in
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society.
Finally
, couples should respect each other and
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the
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partner"s opinion. To conclude, in
this
modern age, intolerance in families is increasing day by day.
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a number of factors work
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, it would be solved by collective efforts. If laws are implemented,
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values are taken under consideration, people
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likely
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to stay together.
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