Some people think that famous people can help international aid organizations to draw attention to important problems. Others believe that the celebrities can make the problems seem less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It has been argued by few that popular personalities can make it easy to decrease the major problems by attracting the attention of international

aid

organisations.

However

, others opined that famous people cannot make

this

happen.

This

essay will discuss both viewpoints, and I will state my opinion with a reasonable conclusion.

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with, as

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well known

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people have high standards and approaches and they

also

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appreciation for others in our society.

Moreover

, they attract our youth in many ways and the young population do the same as they do.

For example

, a famous man Amitab

Bachaan

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Bachman

, do a number of TV shows and aids, as he organise a show called " who become the Millionaire". Apart from that, if these famous artists will draw the attention of local organisations towards

the

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social problems like poverty, lack of education and hospitality in society, it will surely decrease these problems one day.

On the other hand

, some folks have opposite viewpoints. They opined that these personalities just work for their benefit

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for the local population.

Moreover

, some famous individuals don't like to converse with

aid

organisations which can worsen the problem.

For instance

, in many films, celebrities imposed negative views on those

aid

groups and after ,

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they don't sport each other in

many

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way

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. So, how can the government listen to them

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In conclusion, according to me,

although

the prominent stars help in some ways to draw the attention of

aid

agencies,

this

also

makes it hard in many ways.

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Fully explain your ideas

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