Directors of large companies often receive much bigger salary increases than ordinary workers. Employers' organizations say that in a global market this is necessary to attract the best management talent. What are your views?

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society, large ventures offer
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salary
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to
directors
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workers
because
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to attract
talent
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people around the world. In my opinion, I totally
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the following reasons.
To begin
with,
directors
often have
a higher qualifications
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than ordinary
workers
.
For instance
, a company will often set a higher requirement
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whom that willing to take the responsibilities to become a director.
In contrast
, normal
workers
typically have
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such
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certificate of graduation
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the firms.
Besides
, the risk taken by
directors
is way
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than
workers
.
Directors
often need to have
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of
skills
such
as interpersonal
skills
, management
skills
, and communication
skills
. To
further
illustrate,
directors
often have to
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and managed the project carefully as the failure of
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might lead them to be unemploy. Henceforth, when the project is well managed
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the end of the period,
directors
receive bigger salary increases as they take a higher risk than office
workers
.
Furthermore
, large businesses often provide attractive work benefits to the talents.
This
is due to the fact that a good management company is often to become
sucessful
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businesses in the world.
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,
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with
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well
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organization often have
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clear action
plans
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and ambitious strategy to achieve.
Working
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incentive
program
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, profit share to
directors
, and attendance
bonus
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are some of the working benefits that organizations offer to attract excellent
directors
.
Moreover
,
directors
have
a larger responsibilities
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as
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to normal
workers
,
directors
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to complete and more objectives to achieve. In conclusion, there are
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reasons
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why I agree
directors
have
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higher pay and increases in their salaries, all of which I think
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reasonable and acceptable.
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