Some people think that when many imported films or TV programmes are shown inna country,it can improve the country's culture.Others feel that it is better for a country to make and broadcast its own movies and TV shows.Discuss both sides and give your own view

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well known
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topic that foreign films and television shows have become more popular among citizens in most
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countries
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the countries
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throughout the world.
As a result
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and some think it has
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impact on
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culture while others feel it is better to produce local movies and dramas.In
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discussion ,I am going to discuss two sides and suggest my own idea.
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people
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the people
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watch television as
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hobby.
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movies and TV shows directly affect
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their lifestyles in various ways.If there are plenty of foreign shows on TV ,they bring
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cultures
o f
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different countries to our
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.In Sri Lanka,Indian and Korean mega series
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most
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tv channels.
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visitors gain experience about cultures without visiting those countries.
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it will help to improve some aspects of their lives.
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,citizens can learn about their own culture by watching local films and shows.And
also
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economy will be raised.
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the
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Korean mega series are popular among younger generations across the
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earn lots of profit.When
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regarding
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point,quality local products
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up
better
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country
. In conclusion,
although
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television shows,both local and foreign movies and dramas affect
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culture. According to my point of view.,both are essential and it's
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our
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to handle those programmes carefully.
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