Today, may people have little knowledge about the importance of natural world. What are the reasons for this? How can we solve this problem?

The natural
world
plays a critical part in human being's life ,but nowadays folks forget to enhance our beautiful
environment
to clean and green it,they have very small knowledge of the natural
world
. In
this
essay.I will discuss the reasons why it happened and give a better solution.
Firstly
, in
this
hectic ,schedule people do not go through environmental enhancement. Individuals usually focus on their workspace .
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internet there are many little details. Because the media do not cover nature conditions due to low views, people aren't going through and take it seriously that the
environment
is the only beneficial way to stay long and active .
Secondly
, it is less priority and awareness among
young
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generation . Meanwhile in the education
system
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government have to add natural
world
aspects so children are aware
from
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their childhood
manage
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their society .
For example
in
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around 20
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equivalent of
world
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the world
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population .
Thirdly
media overwhelmed the advertisement towards natural protection . Every lock has
key
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, To
solute
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this
problem government have to take strict action
among
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the
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society create awareness to organise camps to provide significant information for individual, so they know
who
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much
natural
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the natural
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environment
is important to them and take it seriously.
Moreover
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media have to broadcast natural habitat advertisements so more and more masses work together for the betterment of
nation
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.
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more
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authority
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have
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to provide knowledge to children in education
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so they learn the importance
.
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In conclusion,
i
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assert that many programs will be organised to salute
this
problem ,
beacuse
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because
their
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is less priority and awareness about
environment
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the environment
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. publishing and government have a critical hand in
this
to make
great
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chance in it .
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