Some people believe that research into family history is useful for the next generations, while others claim that present and future are more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Certain ethnicity in the world
have
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an obligation to acknowledge their
familys'
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family's
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background in the terms of continuing the traditions or
take
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a lesson
of
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on
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how they did in
life
. It is argued by others that the
outweight
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outweigh
thing is trusting their own
life
and
enjoy
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enjoying
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every process
day
by
day
. I believe it is still relevant to learn from our older
generation
but only the individual itself can make a
decission
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decision
on
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in
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their
life
. To start with, particular
ethnics
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ethnicities
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still believe that their young
generation
are
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is
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not allowed to forget where they came from and the background of their ethnicity. Even some of them have
an
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a
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specific occupation to make their
anchestor
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ancestor
ancestors
as
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apply
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their role model in
life
like them.
For instance
, the
chinese
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Chinese
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people
very
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are very
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inspired by the way their
ancestor
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ancestors
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live. They believe the past
is give
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gives
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the necessary lessons for the
next
generation
to continue their existence in
this
world.
On the other hand
, other people think that the
outweight
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outweigh
lesson in
life
is how to be a better person
day
by
day
, no matter where these lessons came from. They think that it is not reasonably important to learn about the past, because today's world has been different from perhaps
a
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apply
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fifty years ago.
Furthermore
, they put a hundred
percent
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per cent
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trust in themself to
running
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run
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their
life
without looking back to the older
generation
.
Consequently
, they
not
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do not
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have a big
presure
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pressure
to
sattisfied
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satisfied
their parents or other
family's
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family
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member and can be themselves,
such
as
make
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making
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their own path and
be
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being
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whoever
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whomever
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they want without feeling guilty
of
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about
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being different. All in all, indeed it is important to not forget where you came from. Yet,
human
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humans
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need to create their own path in
life
and make their own efforts towards their
life
. In my opinion,
human
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humans
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have to be empowered by themselves but not
forgeting
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forgetting
where they came from and respect the older
one
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ones
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.
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