Nowadays children has become more addicted to TV and because of that their physical activity level is decreasing. What can be the cause and possible solution to that?

In

this

day and age, the vast majority of youngsters could not live a day without sophisticated technologies

such

as TV, smartphone, laptop and etc.

Consequently

, more and more undergraduates are suffering

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low physical activity which causes both psychological and physical obstacles. In the forthcoming

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essay will discuss its possible consequences and solution with relevant examples.

First

and foremost, Not getting enough physical activity could lead to heart

diseases

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even for people who have no other risk factors. It can

also

increase the likelihood of developing other heart disease risk factors, including obesity, high blood pressure, and type 2 diabetes. On top of that, the mental health of

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could

be significantly deteriorated

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since

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poor condition of health would entirely ruin the appeal of the individual. As a matter of fact, approximately 70

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of people who are struggling

against

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obesity and heart issues tend to be in depression and

anxiety

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.

Therefore

, being sluggish because of addiction to

technologies

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technology

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will considerably harm both physical and mental

condition

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conditions

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.

On the other hand

, in order to get rid of

this

paramount problem

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parents should consider measures.

In other words

, the guardians should make a proper talk with

offspring

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and make an attempt to convince them about

dramatic

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consequences of it.

As a result

, a youngster may realise the importance of

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issue and begin to decrease

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screen time step by step. To conclude, even though being indolent is quite harmful

for

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undergraduates,

however

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it could be effortlessly solved by a proper talk between parent and offspring.