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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Psychologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel. For this reason, attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals. How true is this statement? How far does colour influence people’s health and capacity for work?

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Through the evolution of
this
 global pandemic, it became increasingly clear that patients with pre-existing conditions
such
 as diabetes mellitus, chronic kidney diseases (CKD), chronic cardiovascular disease, underlying malignancies, organ transplant recipients, and chronic liver disease are at increased risk for developing severe post COVID-19 complications. One
of
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such
 complication seen after Covid-19 is
mucormycosis
. Oral
mucormycosis
 is a rare but highly fatal disease. Early diagnosis and timely treatment of rhinomaxillary
mucormycosis
 are necessary to limit the spread of infection, which
otherwise
 can lead to high morbidity and mortality. Dental healthcare practitioners should be familiar with its initial presentation, which if left undiagnosed or ignored can rapidly spread to the orbital and cerebral region leading to death.
This
 review article describes the clinical features in its initial stage, relevant clinical investigations, treatment, and
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 of an inter-professional team approach in the early management of patients with
post COVID-19
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mucormycosis
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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