With divorce rates and family breakdowns increasing globally, it is generally accepted that families today are not as close as they used to be. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solution to it.

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that, nowadays amount of divorces

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increasing universally year by year.One possible solution to

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problem is to impose heavy taxes on divorces and use

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money for

children

who do not have parents, that to say they live in

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essay considers the reasons

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problem and

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some possible solutions to it. One of the

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is that in recent years many young

people

and their parents do not take into consideration

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young

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and

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ages to marry.Because they do not have information about family, they cannot take care

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their new families.

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, they do not know real life. Another cause

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problem is that

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today's

children

not as patient as the

people

in the past. Impatience principally causes

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divorce.

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, we often see some

people

have

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disagreements

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then

they go to

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court

As a result

, their

children

have to live without their mothers or fathers.

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Nevertheless

, there are solutions.

First

and foremost, the heavy taxes would discourage

people

from divorcing because it would be very expensive. At present taxes are already high for a lot of

people

In addition

, if

children

learn about family and how can

people

provide their family with money,

then

they would ready to marry. Teaching about real life would be

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way to

children

and their future. To conclude, divorce rates and family breakdowns increasing universally and families today are not as close as they used to be.

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