With divorce rates and family breakdowns increasing globally it is generally accepted that families today are not as close as they used to be . Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it

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With

divorce

rates and family breakdowns increasing globally it is generally accepted that families today are not as close as they used to be . Discuss the causes of

this

problem and offer some possible solutions to it. In recent times

divorce

rates and separations are increasingly growing in the world. As

the

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result of

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families nowadays are moving away from each other compared to previous times . In

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I will discuss the causes

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these phenomenon

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and provide

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options to overcome

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of all

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the majority of couples expect each other lot of things .

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, family

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member gas work

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children's fathers and mothers . After

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who

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mother or father

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care

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children or infant

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they do not have that understanding partners .

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reason

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they can not agree .

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other families

not

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enough

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financial source .

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have financial resource . He can not supply his

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necessity .

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if his wife

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divorce

. The above examples detail some of the causes due to which people do not wish to live in a relationship. There are two effective solutions to surmount

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divorce

problem.

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way to tackle

this

is to go for a

pre -marriage

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counseling

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there

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psychologist can help people and explain the nitty gritty of marriage. It will

also

help

this people

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to easily understand each other .

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marriage

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couples can

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take help by means of marriage

counseling

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and give a

second

chance to their troubled relationship. The other way is to talk openly with the partner without any prejudice regularly.

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by following above mentioned approaches both partners understand each other better and can try to live happily. By way of

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I once again reaffirm

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that family breakdowns are caused by

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plethora of

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and couples can take help from

psychologist

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a psychologist

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who can help them to understand each other better and live happily

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With divorce rates and family breakdowns increasing globally it is generally accepted that families today are not as close as they used to be . Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it

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stress-related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. what do you think are the causes of this? what solutions can you suggest?

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