With divorce rates and family breakdowns increasing globally it is generally accepted that families today are not as close as they used to be . Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it

With
divorce
rates and family breakdowns increasing globally it is generally accepted that families today are not as close as they used to be . Discuss the causes of
this
problem and offer some possible solutions to it. In recent times
divorce
rates and separations are increasingly growing in the world. As
the
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a
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result of
this
families nowadays are moving away from each other compared to previous times . In
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I will discuss the causes
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of these
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these phenomenon
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this phenomenon
these phenomena
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and provide
few
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a few
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options to overcome
it
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them
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.
First
of all
this
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these
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days
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the majority of couples expect each other lot of things .
For instance
, family
each
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apply
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member gas work
that
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the
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children's fathers and mothers . After
this
phenomenon comes up one question
that
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who
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which
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mother or father
take
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takes
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care
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of then
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then
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children or infant
.
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Who will cook
thier
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their
the
dinner
.
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Then
they do not have that understanding partners .
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is
reason
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the reason
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they can not agree .
In addition
that another important reason is
another important reason is
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other families
not
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do not
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enough
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have enough
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financial source .
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husband
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the husband
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don't
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doesn't
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have financial resource . He can not supply his
spouse
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spouse's
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necessity .
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example
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if his wife
want
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wants
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to buy something
then
he
don
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dons
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not have money . After
this
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event may
come
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comes
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to
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divorce
. The above examples detail some of the causes due to which people do not wish to live in a relationship. There are two effective solutions to surmount
this
divorce
problem.
On
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way to tackle
this
is to go for a
pre -marriage
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pre-marriage
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counseling
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counselling
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there
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their
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psychologist can help people and explain the nitty gritty of marriage. It will
also
help
this people
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this person
these people
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to easily understand each other .
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marriage
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couples can
also
take help by means of marriage
counseling
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and give a
second
chance to their troubled relationship. The other way is to talk openly with the partner without any prejudice regularly.
As a result
by following above mentioned approaches both partners understand each other better and can try to live happily. By way of
conclusion
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I once again reaffirm
position
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my position
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that family breakdowns are caused by
the
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a
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plethora of
expectation
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expectations
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and couples can take help from
psychologist
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a psychologist
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who can help them to understand each other better and live happily
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