In many countries, people like to eat a wider variety of food than can be grown in their local area. As a result, much of the food people eat today has to come from other regions. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh disadvantages?

In the present age, there has been much discussion revolving around the issue
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it is more valuable to consume
products
from the local area or
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imported
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food from other areas. I would assert that I partially agree that
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humans should appreciate and eat local productions and in
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I will explain why.
First
of all, it is crucial for
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human being to support their local productions by purchasing and consuming
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foods. To be more exact, a human is required to think of their area’s
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, since it deeply affects the quality of
this
person’s life. And to achieve an upward tendency in the local area’s wealth, people should consider helping it financially.
For instance
, by purchasing more pastries from the local bakery, an individual assists the store by advertising its name and providing needed finances for the bakery's development.
In contrast
, the
products
imported from other regions provide a wider variety and choice
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foods. In the consuming world that we live
nowadays
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a human being is always eager for newness and variety. As the local stores cannot provide the required need in the food consumption sphere, the
products
from other areas would give a hand.
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, when the local facilities are not capable of satisfying the requirements for seafood,
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imported
products
are there to help with the demand. Considering the above discussion, I would make a conclusion that both buying local and imported food is valuable and has
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essential benefits. As the consumption of local
products
has its advantage in assisting facilities in growing and advancing, so does the tendency of importing by providing an enhanced choice in meals.
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