Some people think that the teenage years are the happinest time of most people lives, others think that adult brings more happiness, inspite greater responsibities

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years are the best

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life. I have some reasons to support

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for you. You could focus to learn and save

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you excited and happy with pure friends in school.

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age you can do anything which you are passion because you have a lot of

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that, when you grow up, you have to find

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society. Nowadays,

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their children. Maybe

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young times and

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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

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