You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria Say what is wrong with it Suggest how it could be improved

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter to express my concern relating to our college cafeteria which is located between the library and the main building. I always have my lunch there because it has a variety of dishes whereas others cannot available. I enjoy the Italian cuisine in
this
place because I can feel the authentic taste. The price is
also
quite reasonable for the students and we can
also
obtain some discount if we can present our student ID card. Unfortunately, the lighting system in
this
place is not sufficient and I cannot read properly inside the cafe.Many students are willing to study if the lighting system is well enough . I would like to suggest the lighting system should replace with the new one
instead
of upgrading the existing one because the cost can be the same.
However
, the new lighting can be used for a long time . I hope you may consider my suggestion and improve the facilities
accordingly
. Yours faithfully, Thomas
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