You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria Say what is wrong with it Suggest how it could be improved

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

letter to express my concern relating to our college cafeteria which is located between the library and the main building. I always have my lunch there because it has a variety of dishes whereas others cannot available. I enjoy the Italian cuisine in

this

place because I can feel the authentic taste. The price is

also

quite reasonable for the students and we can

also

obtain some discount if we can present our student ID card. Unfortunately, the lighting system in

this

place is not sufficient and I cannot read properly inside the cafe.Many students are willing to study if the lighting system is well enough . I would like to suggest the lighting system should replace with the new one

instead

of upgrading the existing one because the cost can be the same.

However

, the new lighting can be used for a long time . I hope you may consider my suggestion and improve the facilities

accordingly

. Yours faithfully, Thomas

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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria Say what is wrong with it Suggest how it could be improved

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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