Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country’s health budget a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending in health education and preventive measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is a fact that preventing from being sick is
beneficial
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than
treatment
.
Governments
by increasing the budget
of
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for
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training healthy
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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and investing
on
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this
sector will be benefited rather than spending on caring
and
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for and
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curing patients’ people. Investing in
health
education and public awareness, help to reduce
diseases
and
saving
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money. Costs of
treatment
and hospitals are high in most countries,
additionally
,
treatment
has cost for
governments
too. Because
governments
want to equip hospitals with
the
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sophisticated medical technologies and equipment,
therefore
, these tools put a huge burden on the
governments
.
For example
, the number of diabetics is increasing, in my country, while
by
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awareness and education can prevent or keep the speed of incidence of diabetes or heart
diseases
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disease
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.
Such
steps toward
health
education will help to reduce the cost of
treatment
and
number
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the number
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of patients in near future. Several
governments
combat
against
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some
diseases
such
as poor sanitation, viruses, and heart
diseases
. While prevention help to reduce the infection of
such
problems
,
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if
governments
do some actions.
For example
, some
governments
can make more parks, gyms and fitness buildings with lower costs rather than making more
health
centers
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. The more people
do
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exercise, the
less
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fewer
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hearth
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heart
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diseases
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disease
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and diabetes will happen.
This
may enable by informing and educating
public
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the public
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about their
health
, and above all by allocating a portion of
budget
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the budget
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of
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preventive measures to heighten
the
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public awareness. In conclusion, I agree with increasing the budget for educating people having a healthy lifestyle and doing preventive measures rather than spending on equipping hospitals and
treatment
.
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