Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country’s health budget a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending in health education and preventive measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is a fact that preventing from being sick is

beneficial

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than

treatment

.

Governments

by increasing the budget

of

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for

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training healthy

lifestyle

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lifestyles

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and investing

on

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in

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this

sector will be benefited rather than spending on caring

and

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for and

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curing patients’ people. Investing in

health

education and public awareness, help to reduce

diseases

and

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money. Costs of

treatment

and hospitals are high in most countries,

additionally

,

treatment

has cost for

governments

too. Because

governments

want to equip hospitals with

the

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sophisticated medical technologies and equipment,

therefore

, these tools put a huge burden on the

governments

.

For example

, the number of diabetics is increasing, in my country, while

by

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awareness and education can prevent or keep the speed of incidence of diabetes or heart

diseases

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disease

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.

Such

steps toward

health

education will help to reduce the cost of

treatment

and

number

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the number

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of patients in near future. Several

governments

combat

against

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some

diseases

such

as poor sanitation, viruses, and heart

diseases

. While prevention help to reduce the infection of

such

problems

,

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if

governments

do some actions.

For example

, some

governments

can make more parks, gyms and fitness buildings with lower costs rather than making more

health

centers

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centres

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. The more people

do

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exercise, the

less

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fewer

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hearth

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heart

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diseases

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disease

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and diabetes will happen.

This

may enable by informing and educating

public

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the public

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about their

health

, and above all by allocating a portion of

budget

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the budget

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of

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preventive measures to heighten

the

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public awareness. In conclusion, I agree with increasing the budget for educating people having a healthy lifestyle and doing preventive measures rather than spending on equipping hospitals and

treatment

.