The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world
The pie charts show a comparison of different uses of
water
between residential, industry and agriculture, in
San
Diego
County,
California
and in worldwide.
It is clear that
,
San
Diego
county the
usage
of
water
in residential part more than in
California
and the rest of the world.
Otherwise
, agricultural
water
usage
takes place worldwide more than in
California
and
San
Diego
.
However
, the
water
usage
of the industry has the same
percentage
in
San
Diego
and worldwide. In
San
Diego
county, the proportion of
water
usage
in agriculture is 17% become the least compared to
California
which is 28%
besides
, the worldwide reach is 69% which is the highest. But, in
San
Diego
, the
percentage
of the residential section
water
usage
is 60% more than in
California
and in the rest of the world which becomes 39% and 8% respectively. About the industry, it has moderate percentages among all the mentioned countries, but the highest
percentage
is in
California
which
reach
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33% of
water
usage
.
On the other hand
,
San
Diego
besides
the rest of the world has the same
percentage
of 23% of
water
usage
.
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